Feedback:
Your story idea works well, but you have too many images.
Your images are well drawn, and have some good interesting framings but there are too many similar quite wide shots of the phone.
Be more selective in showing the phone, when scrolling images it’s fine but intercutting the conversation on the phone will be too fast or waste a lot of screen time.
To get around this make more use of facial expressions when the people are looking at the phone.
When the friend visits the guy, we don’t need to see much of the journey at all, you could almost jump from her punching yes on the phone to her being at his front door.
Make use of any frames you “earn back” from editing the end and opening for fine tuning the set up of the story.
The feedback I got from the assessment suggested that I had too many frames, as I was supposed to be making a 40 second animatic and I had over 30 frames, meaning some frames would have to last less than a second and the whole animatic would be very fast paced. Before moving forward with any new ideas I would need to cut any scenes that were not absolutely essential to the narrative. Also to make up for any lost scenes/information I should make more use of body language and facial expressions in order to show reactions and thoughts about things that are happening to the characters.
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