Edited storyboard

Following the feedback I received I went on to edit my storyboard and cut out scenes so I would have a maximum of 20 shots, and only the important information.

As I was limited to a 40 second animatic I decided that the opening panning shots of the city were not needed, as the location was not that important for this story. Also I plan to reflect the shots of the girl talking, and keep them facing the same direction, so when she is texting the guy and he replies it looks as if there is a conversation going on, and will also give the audience this impression.

I cut the shots the show the phone and messages appearing on their own because I thought these could be shown in shots with the characters in them, and also later on in the story when the text messages are shown, as the viewers will be able to catch up on any conversation at that point without showing it twice.

I merged some scenes, so instead of cutting to different shots the scene would just run as one continuous conversation; the same way messages on a phone would come through one after the other, this also allows me to show an active conversation between the two characters.

Again I cut out shots with details that could be shown/combined into other shots, and merged two shots as it should've been a single shot originally because it showed one movement.

Here I completely cut out the journey of the friend on the way to the guys house as I think the conversation between them shows that they have made this plan clear. 

I skipped straight to the friend arriving outside the guys house, just so we know where she is etc. I found it harder to cut scenes from this part of the story board, as this part is where the plot twist/secret is revealed and the different shots play an important role in setting this up to surprise the audience, so I did end up keeping most of the scenes- however stayed within the limit. 

This would be my final shot after the friend is grabbed. The front door would slam shut and a wide shot of the house would be shown before it cuts to black, however I'm thinking of getting rid of this shot as well as it's not really needed. I think the shot of the friend being grabbed is enough on it's own to create a little bit of a cliffhanger and some suspense at the end. A benefit of getting rid of this shot would be that I would have an extra shot left for editing other scenes.